Shabbat

We stood tall as Shabbat candles

Bodies staid and separate

White, solid,

pristine

Our flames steadied

And apart in silver candlestick foundations – yet

There is oneness

Image by Raya Kridel from Pixabay

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Written for dVerse Palinode challenge. The poem of mine to which I wrote is Palinode is “Havdalah“, about the end of Shabbat.

Havdalah

We were supposed to be a havdalah candle –

bodies twined together, melting into each other,

my wax kissing your cheek and

your wax kissing my cheek.

Our wicks dancing in the same flame – but –

like the end of an unsecured braid,

I feel our base unravel.

© 2021 Jewish Young Professional

21 comments

  1. Clever. I like the dueling dichotomies of oneness and imbalance, separation and steadiness. Not what one would initially expect, but it comes off clean and well-crafted. Cheers.

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  2. The Havdalah poem is beautiful, I especially love ‘my wax kissing your cheek and your wax kissing my cheek’ and ‘Our wicks dancing in the same flame’. The isolated – but – is a clever bridge to the change in tone. I love the way it all comes together again in the palinode, from the ‘Bodies staid and separate’ to steadied flames, the circle complete in oneness.

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