
“Every cloud has a silver lining” – proverb
We watch the heavy storm –
Clouds whose bellies hang low,
Weighted with our expectations
For silver linings – but life is just
Phantom pregnancies, labor pains
That do not deliver joy.
If such linings were common, they’d be plastic;
We’d pollute the ocean with them.
They’re only silver because they’re rare.
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Written for dVerse
I love this!
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Thanks!
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Wow, I adore the imagery in this. It’s powerful and beautiful. ❤
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Thank you!!
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Two lines I totally didn’t see coming and they delighted me on because of that: the hantom pregnancy and if the linings were plastic we’d pollute the oceans with them. This is my favorite that I;ve read of yours, it’s crisp and pointed.
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please pardon the Typonese!
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Thanks Shay! That’s high praise coming from you.
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A sad, stark poem. And that dig at our penchant for cheap plastic options to replace the real deal…
Our irresponsible consumerism. Much to think about in this poem!
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If we have a good thing, we still manage to trash it,sadly.
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Such fine imagery. All beauty, by its very nature, is transitory. Fresh is temporary but stale lingers forever
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Thank you!
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It certainly feels like that at times. Nice job of showing us the emotions in this proverb.
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I am a pretty pessimistic person by nature, I am afraid. I thought it would be interesting to flip the proverb/cliche on its head and go in a totally different direction
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I never thought of the proverb this way. I had noticed that many dark clouds are indeed lacking the silver; but you impart a sense of urgent expectation and then disappointment through the images of your poem. Kinda dreading the next “cloud” to settle over my head now.
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I admit to being a pessimist, but I also think it was time to mix this cliche up. Sometimes dark clouds just suck.
But I feel bad because I didn’t mean to turn you into a miserable pessimist too!
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Nah don’t worry about me, I’m a pessimist born and bred 😛
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Same here. Ironically, part of my name means “hope” – it doesn’t suit me at all!
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Hope for the best, expect the worst, and you can’t go wrong.
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It’s interesting that they would be plastic pollutants if “silver linings” were common… Thought-provoking.
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You’d think we would value a good thing, but I am convinced we would still find a way to trash it.
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terrific: succinct and it packs a punch: silver linings are very topical with all sorts of comments coming out about the silver linings in lockdowns, the most common being, a huge drop in ‘flu cases and deaths over the last few years —-
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Everything is perspective. Fewer flu cases is a silver lining, but if you got COVID or if your business failed during the lockdowns, it’s not a particularly satisfying silver lining. (None of that happened to me; I am just a pessimistic complainer!)
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And every silver lining has one big fat dark cloud attached to it.
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Oof! And I thought I was excessively pessimistic!
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😁
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You’re very talented!!
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Thank you!
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Your last line is fantastic. The poem is very dad nit holds a lot of truth.
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Thank you – I felt it was time to move past this cliche.
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Wonderful spin you put on the proverb, Jewish Young Professional.
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Thanks! I did go in a darker direction. But I felt it was time to look beyond the cliche.
-JYP
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You’re welcome.
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Love this ❤️
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Thank you ❤️
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That is a wonderfully poignant poem, and very practical in its pessimism. You are a suburb wordsmith.
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“Practical in its pessimism” – I may borrow that description. Thanks!
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You are welcome to it. I hope all is well and not too many clouds are covering your silver linings.
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I think if I cleaned my glasses/windows/other metaphorical lens, I’d see the silver linings just fine.
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When we clean up our little corners of the world, then we are ready to work on making the world a better place.
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Brilliant lines!
or silver linings – but life is just
Phantom pregnancies, labor pains
That do not deliver joy.
If such linings were common, they’d be plastic
☺️
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I love those lines too. I thought the language of pregnancy provided an interesting metaphor.
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It worked! ☺️
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Sorry, not every cloud has such a lining, but if we survive the storm, we can at least try to make sure that everyone has shelter before the next one hits.
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Thank you, Shira! I can always count on you to pull me out of this wallowing, pessimistic funk and get me thinking about productive ways to make the future a bit brighter
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LOL!
Then that must be what I am here to do in this life!
🙂
Thank you, JYP!!
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You are here to do far greater things than merely propping me up when I am in a crappy mood. I just reap some of the benefits 😄
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LOL! Helping another to feel better is one of the things that each of us is here to do, no? And is is not a great thing?
🙂
Very glad that you feel some benefit from my existence!
🙂
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A most enjoyable read – almost pessimistic but not quite as you replace every with some “They’re only silver because they’re rare.”
I especially loved these lines:
“Clouds whose bellies hang low,
Weighted with our expectations”
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Thanks! The image of a cloud pregnant with our hopes and dreams really struck me and I went with it. I love those lines too!
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A poignant poem, beautiful imagery👌👌
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Thanks!
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Wonderfully done! I love the ending so much! Rare indeed! And a joy when they do appear!
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Thanks! They are rare, more rare than we would like, although I acknowledge that perception depends on perspective. But I think there’s also a truth that if we got those joyous outcomes more often, we’d still manage to complain (or maybe that’s just me)
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You are welcome! Yes, it is human nature to always want just a little bit more!
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“Phantom pregnancies” … love how you used it in your poem. Great write.
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Thanks! I found I really loved this image/metaphor for the clouds.
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This is incredibly hard-hitting and evocative! 💝💝
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Thanks! Gotta take a tired cliche and spin it in a different direction, right?
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Excellent! Such striking imagery. I love the direction you took with this cloud–and the rarity of the silver lining.
Of course, I’m the person who sees wonder in rainbows after the storm. 😏
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Thanks! I thought it was time for a different take on the cliche.
I’m a pessimist, but I think you should see wonder in the rainbows! They are beautiful and something to appreciate and celebrate
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You’re very welcome. 😀
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“Phantom pregnancies, labor pains
That do not deliver joy.”
oomph
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Yeah, the idea of the clouds pregnant with hopes and dreams that may not materialize vs. lined with silver really spoke to me.
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…because that’s real life, which you’re really good at capturing/noticing/highlighting 😉
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Thanks!
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Every silver lining is the tin foil dropping after someone else has eaten the chocolate.
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Damn – that is quite the depressing, yet wonderfully vivid image!
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It seemed in keeping with your poem. Life is too interesting to waste on trivialities like false hope and optimism.
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Definitely true!
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Wonderful poem. I love the imagery (and the breadth of what you are able to convey within a few lines.)
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Thank you! I think this is one of my favorites that I have written.
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I can see why. In fact, I’m going to reblog it tomorrow.
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Wow, I am touched and honored!
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Wow, this is a gorgeous poem! 😀👌
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Thank you!
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you write poetry very well, and i see that you post stuff at dverse and yet i never run across it, i will have to be more observant. enjoyed this very much!
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Thank you so much. I am overdue to read your latest poems as well!
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