
This country is a pie, the crust too flaky
to support its filling, overbaked
in a pressure cooker oven
till the smooth dough façade cracks
like continental fault lines,
angry fruits bubbling up like lava
to its gerrymandered, fractured surface.
***
Using someone else’s birthdate (Jan 16, 1972), on which “American Pie” by Don McLean charted #1 for dVerse
That is one fine allegory. I would have made “fruit” plural.
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Good point! I think I had “fruit” because the line was originally “angry fruit filling” and I cut “filling”. You’re right – it should be fruits. I’m going to take your suggestion and change it.
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Cool! It makes me want to drive my Chevy to the levee, and, believe me, the levee is dry right now. But since I don’t have a Chevy, I’ll have to walk.
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I used to have a Chevy. A cute red Chevy Aveo. But I don’t have it now.
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I had two 1958 Chevy Pickups a long long time ago, a 1956 Cadillac, and a 1966 Corvair (that killer car in “Unsafe At Any Speed”). Those are the Chevys I owned. My first Car was a Ramble American. Then I had a Dodge Pickup,a couple of Dodge Darts, a Volkswagen Thing, a Volkswagen Beetle, a Renault Le Car, a Mazda 323, a Kia 5, a Mazda 5, and two Mazda RX-8s. Before cars I had several motorcycles. I still have a 1982 Ford Pickup, my Mazda Mx-5 and Laurie’s Mazda Speed 3. Tristan has our old 66 VW Beetle and her Nissan 280ZX on our property.
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What a coincidence. My first car was a ’64 Corvair, and my girlfriend at the time drove a ’66 Beetle.
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We still have a 66 Beetle.
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It’s over for our country.
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I wish that wasn’t the case, but I have no optimism for us.
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Nope, time to head for the hills and live off the grid. Except I can’t even take care of myself with modern amenities. Guess I’m screwed.
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Well, you’ve got company because I can’t either
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you really don’t? and not just because you’re a pessimist?
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I’ll admit that there are days when I can’t tell apart my own political opinions from my general depressed/pessimistic outlook on life.
But no, I don’t have much optimism for American society.
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what would you say are the top 3 reasons and/or examples of this political reality?
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The two big ones that come to mind are:
1) the broken two-party political system – including, but not limited to, gerrymandering, the electoral college, the laws based on political expediency rather than best long-term policy, etc
2) The state of online political discourse- 10-20 years ago, people read/listened to other opinions, could have friends across the aisle, etc. I really don’t feel like that is the case anymore.
To be clear, I think the problem is the broken crust rather than the angry fruits. But I am not convinced that the angry fruits are going to manage any productive long-term change.
What are your reasons for optimism?
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I’m more neutral than optimistic. I’m curious about your perspective because I have not lived in the USA for more than a decade.
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Things are out of hand. There was a novel written in the 19th Century called “Erewhon” by Samuel Butler. He satirized Victorian culture and in is fictional world, criminals are treated with compassion, while the physically ill are punished and shamed. Fast forward 150 years and viola! Our country is becoming like Erewhon.
When I lived in Spain, Spaniards told me about how ballot watchers in many parts parts of Spain made sure you voted for the “correct candidates” or you and your family would suffer. I said we, in the US of A, had an honest, impartial voting system. What an ignorant fool I was.
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I don’t “like” this, but I agree with you; it is sad
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I don’t like it either. But it sadly, more like frighteningly, prophetic.
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To you JYP, and to David as well. A two party system is a feud, while more than two is a discussion, but more than three is likely bordering on confusion, even chaos. If either of you has not read any books by Jeffrey Sachs, I recommend one he wrote in 2015 entitled, “The Age of Sustainable Development”. Exceptional logic! I have also read “ A New Foreign Policy: Beyond American Exceptionalism”. Additional mindful insight. I am about to read “ The Ages of Globalization: Geography, Technology, and Institutions”. I do not consider myself an intellectual, and I am mot usually drawn to books of this type – I am unabashedly a poet and artist. However, I find these books undeniably profound in their vision, so thought I’d share the titles. The world has a long way to go to find balance, and the jury is still out regarding the likelihood it will achieve such — but if enough people of international influence would spend some time with Jeffrey’s reasoning… we might begin to get there? Peace to both of you.
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Interesting. Thanks for the recommendations. I’ll check them out!
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What a great metaphor!! A powerful piece!
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Thank you! I do wish the metaphor weren’t quite so spot on though.
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😦
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Excellent work
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Thanks!
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This rocks out, Jewish Young Professional. So tasty!
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I did make myself hungry while writing this. Thanks!
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🙂 ❤
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Ouch, this strikes to close to home… to the truth of our increasingly tribalized nation.
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Yeah. It was a fitting metaphor.
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Gerrymandering for the win! Well played, JYP!
❤
David
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“gerrymandering for the win” – this is both figuratively and literally true. Good one!
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What a delicious political insight! Only when it’s too close home, it leaves a bad taste in the mouth. 😔
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I did make myself hungry writing this. However yeah, like you said, it hits too close to home to be satisfying and delicious
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Writing about food makes me hungry too!
This world is increasingly becoming less livable.
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We are waiting for the pie to cool so we can get our slices.
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That may require some patience
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I see what you did there! Brilliantly outstanding! 👌
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Thank you!
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Clever comparison…..flakey crust indeed. And the angry fruit filling is boiling over.
I will say this….I have always been an optimist by nature. My daughter once said to me, “Mom, every movie can’t be the Sound of Music.” to which I replied, “Why not?” I think many times we can not control what is happening, but we can control our attitude and response toward it. Oh yes….I get very frustrated by the state of politics these days. My personal frame of reference for when everything seemed to really shift, blatantly shift was at President Obama’s State of the Union address before congress when one senator (I believe) shouted out LIAR and interrupted him. That had never before been done. Yes, people on opposing “sides” would look bored, or not have eye contact with the president speaking, remain seated when the opposing party gave a standing ovation…but never had anyone done anything so blatantly disrespectful. That individual was later censured by Congress and apologized to President Obama….but I truly believe that lit the spark in many ways to the rapid departure of civility on the political scene. I also believe we need term limits for Senators and Representatives. Senator Grassley, at age 88, just announced he will run again. Need I say more about term limits? I choose to concentrate on the Stacey Abrams of this political age….the Mitt Romneys for his sense of ethics and morality. I may not always agree with him on issues, but I do know he has the country in mind and will do the ethical thing. I think we must have hope.
At any rate, I hope it’s a fresh fruit pie, not made with canned fruit that has been on the shelves too long….and that the crust is not tough from being overworked and sitting out too long.
And perhaps we should just shift to birthday cake? 🙂
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The fruit may be fresh, but the political rhetoric is canned and trite. The crust needs to be reworked, I think, more so than overworked.
I am a pessimist by nature (although I love The Sound of Music as much as the next person!), so I admit my bias. I think the problems in this country go beyond a particular party. Sen. Feinstein (age 88) is arguably just as guilty of abusing term limits. One could make the case for the breakdown of political civility starting earlier with the response to President Bush. I almost think pinpointing the origin matters less than figuring out where to go from here.
I agree that Stacey Abrams’ response is much, much more productive than most.
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Brilliant! Your country is fucked. Not that Canada is doing all that great, but the filling isn’t quite as explosive and the crust isn’t quite as flaky.
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Thank you!
(That’s in response to your point about my poem being brilliant, not your line about my country being fucked, although I’m not offended and I can’t say I disagree.)
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Very clever and creative. Will not look at pie the same way again. 🙂
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Now I feel terrible that I’ve ruined pie for you by making you associate it with the broken state of America.
Please put this poem out of mind next time you eat a slice of pie, so you can focus mindfully on the tasty pie and not on the metaphor!
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Don’t worry. Desserts induce amnesia. That’s why people forget that they aren’t supposed to eat so much. 🙂
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Ha! Yes, great point!
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Excellent ! The best summation yet of where your country is heading; I fear it’s happening here in Oz but to a lesser extent —
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I am honored with such high praise of my political commentary!
I am sorry to hear about the challenges in Australia
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govid has shaken up tendencies which were budding before; I suspect such things are occurring elsewhere —
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I was just talking to a contact in Victoria for a work call – she said that they’re on lockdown again (something like 250 non-consecutive days of lockdown) and that there are riots in the street all the time!
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that’s right; it’s almost out of control there; fortunately our State, South Australia, which is next to Victoria has had no covid cases for months and is very stable politically; Victoria and to a lesser extent NSW are very worrying —
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I’m happy your state is doing well, but that is troubling re: Victoria and NSW
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your angry fruits makes me think of a red chey called “chistine”. i do not want to meet her at the levy. great poem.
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Thanks!
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This is incredibly potent! The situation is no doubt very worrying.. I am hoping everything gets under control soon! Sending prayers. 💝
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Thanks! I hope so too!
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Great piece. I think in the near future we may see some changes (maybe a new recipe will fall from the heavens) (my optimism) 😄
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I’ll admit to having a lot less optimism on this, but we can certainly hope for this!
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It will take a divine act to improve things. Who knows what will happen next!
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That I agree with. We have a “Prayer For Our Country” towards the end of our Shabbat morning (Saturday morning) prayers and I find myself saying it rather fervently!
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What a great metaphor for America coming apart… still there is hope that maybe in the end it will come together to something sweet. Maybe it just need some cooling
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Well, I certainly hope so. I’m not that optimistic, but good point about the need for cooling down.
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“gerrymandered, fractured surface” — Indeed!
And great inspiration. The song was out when I attended SUNY at Buffalo. Not that you couldn’t figure the lyrics out anyway, but they were put in the student newspaper, which was pretty cool.
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Thanks! Jan 16, 1972 is not my birthdate but I borrowed it for the prompt. It is a great song!
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You packed a full can of the filling (and feeling) into your pie allegory. Fresh, funny, and on point. You have a good knack for this (and don’t deprecate yourself about what is a real talent and fresh eye).
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Thank you! I am actually quite proud of this allegory / poem!
I do wish the state of the country were such that the poem wouldn’t be quite so spot-on though.
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i like this, very concise, pulling no punches “angry fruits bubbling up like lava” lots of anger out there, the story never changes, the powers that be sabotage each other (and us) to gain and maintain power using us as weapons and shields, and we cheer them on for it… good times
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Exactly. So much anger, and all the politicians keep fueling, stoking the flames to use it to their political advantage while the pie just burns. It’s such a disaster of a situation. I did enjoy writing this poem though, so there’s that
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