
Round midnight, earth dreams cozily under white blankets. Days later, roads once vibrant black as a grand piano become gray, crusted with corrosive salt. Trees stripped, perfect illusion falling like a naked old face. The smooth jazz of hibernation turns to rude not-yet-spring awakening.
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Written for Shay’s Word Garden Word List, RDP, dVerse, and loosely inspired by The Sunday Muse
Very well written.
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Thank you!
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You are very welcome, dear friend.
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This is simply beautiful, JYP! I love “black as a grand piano” and how it links with the “smooth jazz of hibernation”. I love the feel of the poem. I love “perfect illusion falling like a naked old face”. And I love your choice of photo too. 🙂 As soon as I saw the Chinese characters I felt nostalgia for my time in China – especially as it’s the only winter Christmas I can remember ever having.
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Thanks! One of the prompts inspiring this (loosely) was related to a well-known jazz pianist, hence the music references.
I can’t take credit for the image, but I’m glad it resonated. When and for how long did you live in China?
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1 year in Xiaogan – a small city about an hour from the (now) famous Wuhan in Hubei Province. I was teaching English – a “foreign expert” Amazing year.
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Super cool! Sounds like an awesome experience
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I used to like the snow when I was young and you wrote of it well. But now the cold is a bother and treats me harshly. I’m glad we don’t have much of that stuff here along the Texas Gulf Coast.
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I find snow to be one of those things that’s pleasant once early in the season and then quickly becomes a nuisance
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Fantastic poem. Wonderful imagery of the daze between winter and spring.
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Thanks! Yeah, that weird in-between stage between winter and spring
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We have low teens in the mornings, and 60ish in the afternoons with clear skies. High wind warnings today.
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Quite a range there!
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Life in the high desert southwest. Large temperature ranges and quick changes in temperature. When we walk out to see the cranes and owls at sunset, the temperature will be 50 degrees when we leave the house. The sunsets and 30 minutes later the temperature has plummeted to 35 degrees.
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Nice one made remember the Sunday prompt photo.
“The smooth jazz
of hibernation”
luv this phrase
Much love…
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It was in part inspired by the The Sunday Muse prompt, but I felt a little odd linking this to the Thelonious Monk portrait because the inspiration is more tangential. But I’m glad you caught the music imagery.
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Nicely done. That beautiful snow does turn to ugly mud.
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Thanks. Exactly – easy to forget what the snow is covering up until it melts, and yet the beauty of spring hasn’t arrived yet
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I love your poem. Spring makes a cold sloppy entrance only to retreat again and again!
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Thanks! Yeah, things definitely look uglier before they look prettier with the arrival of spring
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But it is worth the wait! :>)
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Such a wonderful piece! The imagery is clear and concise. 💖
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Thank you!
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Welcome 💖
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nothing better than the music which speaks to us on a snowy day. i really enjoyed your poem.
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Thank you!
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Oh yes, I know the feeling: I’m so over winter already!
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Same here!
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These final 2.5 lines rock me, JYP.
❤
David
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I liked this ending too. Thanks!
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I came JYP, I read, great work my friend — but I am not well. Be back soon.
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I’m touched and I totally understand – I’m not feeling well myself. Get well soon
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A dismal month, yet there is beauty here and there as it works toward change. Thanks for sharing with the Word List.
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February definitely isn’t a pretty month. Thank you for the word list inspiration
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Love the allusions to music in this well crafted quadrille.
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Thanks! I was inspired in part by a musician inspired prompt.
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I love winter, myself. It’s the noisy, crowded, too-bright summer I can’t deal with.
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I don’t hate winter per se, but by late February, I’ve certainly gotten over the novelty of the snow and I’m ready to move on.
By the way, I loved your “Hipster” – excellent piece!
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Oh, yes. I feel this DEEP, having once lived in Ohio. Reminds me of a Seuss line: “Gray day. Everything is gray. I watch, but nothing moves today.”
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Love that Seuss line – I can definitely relate!
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This is exactly like it has been here… Sunday we had some wonderful sun (though still winter) now it’s just grey and frozen
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I hear you. By February, the grey cold is just so monotonous
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“The smooth jazz
of hibernation turns to rude
not-yet-spring awakening.”
Great verse, JYP.
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Thank you Sunra!
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I love a lot of these lines: “roads once vibrant black as a grand piano” is really great. I can just see the hard lacquer shine of new, wet tarmac. And excellent: “The smooth jazz of hibernation.”
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Thanks! Grand piano black is a great color. I was this close to linking this one to the Thelonius Monk inspired TSM too, hence the music references
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Ah the pangs of winter and I can only imagine all the snow turning into mush!!
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Snow is so much prettier at the beginning of winter. I think a lot of it is just the novelty
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Yes, I guess you are right. I have the same emotions about the rain. At the beginning it feels splendid and later it becomes a drag
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Wonderful way of creating atmosphere with the seasons.
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Thanks! Late February/end of winter definitely isn’t my favorite season. But I am glad that the poem worked
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You’re welcome.
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