I wanted to be a hero that people looked up to. The kind that people wrote books about. And then I became one. People browsed library shelves, climbed ladders to take down books of me and read my biography. I dreamt it, and shockingly, it became reality.
Only it is a strange reality. A label that doesn’t quite fit. Like wearing someone else’s suit. A suit that would fit others better, only they aren’t here; the jacket hangs from my shoulders. I don’t quite believe I deserve this label, and I’m not sure if I want to keep it or return it. I’d like to ask for a second opinion on this hero’s suit, but there’s no one I can ask. No one who will understand. No one I can trust. I wander lonely as a cloud; no one else is in my atmosphere.

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Written for Poets and Storytellers United, Word Of The Day Challenge, The Sunday Muse, and dVerse
Note: This is 100% fictional (Updated: This poem is 87.5% fictional; I did the math). I haven’t done a single thing that could be considered heroic. Only wrote this in first person because of the prompt.
Weird. Very creative.
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Thanks. It is weird. It was an exercise for the prompts.
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Great piece. I love the last line.
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Thanks. I can’t take full credit for the last line – it was from the dVerse prompt to use a line from Wordsworth’s “I Wandered Lonely As A Cloud” / “Daffodils” (Quick internet search is inconclusive on the name of the poem)
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“…no one else is in my atmosphere.” Is a really great line.
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Thanks! That part I can take credit for.
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Wordsworth himself called it ‘Daffodils’. 😀
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Good to know! Much appreciated
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Rosemary, I’m curious. Do you know why I’m also seeing sources suggesting the poem is called “I Wandered Lonely As A Cloud”? (https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poems/45521/i-wandered-lonely-as-a-cloud) Did Wordsworth republish under a different name? Curious to know the background!
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Love this piece of fiction inspired by the line. And the line at the end fits so well. Great illustration as well! I expect many who suddenly find themselves famous are quite shocked when they first get all the attention and find they can’t even walk to the corner grocery store without someone coming up to them! Anonymity is hard to come by once the spotlight has been focused!
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It is a pretty shocking and strange transition. Thank you for the prompt inspiration!
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If the shoe doesn’t fit, guess it should be returned to the store or maybe not.
Love this story. It begs do many questions and addresses so many levels. Not a simple tale at all.
Happy Monday
Much💜love
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Yep. “Fit” is such a good question. Is it an almost fit, or is it totally off? It does beg many questions. Thanks!
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Interesting! I’m wondering why he became famous[?] 😀
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Good question! Couldn’t fit a reason for the heroic fame into a 144 word prompt, so I didn’t write one. What do you think?
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Probably doesn’t need to be explained why he was famous. He just was. 😀
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I think thisbos very empathetic. It probably does feel like that to be suddenly revered and famous. Lonely. And like an impostor.
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I wouldn’t know, but I imagine those feelings of feeling like an imposter or fraud, and feeling oddly lonely, even while surrounded by people who want to be closer to your fame glow.
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Beautifully told, and convincing. I’m sure lots of real heroes do feel like that. (Not that I would know, lol.)
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Thanks! I wouldn’t know either. This is purely imagination.
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The perfect ending. What an addition to Wordsworth’s line. Dare I say, you improved it?
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Flattered and honored by this high praise!
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I love the ending on this!
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Thank you! I can only take credit for the half of it that did not come from Wordsworth.
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Yes, but it fit in so well.
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I think it’d be too much pressure to be someone’s hero, I’d be sad when I disappointed them right away.
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That’s a good thing though. I wish more of today’s celebrity heroes were more sad when they did something disappointing. In fairness though, it does go both ways. Our societal tendency to elevate people talented/successful at one thing to epic celebrity heroes and worship them is not a good thing for anyone.
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It would seem it’s lonely at the top, and the compounded feelings of inadequacy hints at a larger story. Intriguing.
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I could only cram so much into a 144 word prompt, but it does suggest a longer story. Why is this narrator considered a hero? Who are the “others” that the heroic suit jacket might fit better, and why are said others not here? So many questions. Thank you!
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I like where the prompt took you. I’m sure there are some who have found themselves in that situation, not comfortable with the accolades of success and fame.
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When I was younger, I thought my dream was to be famous. Famous for doing something worthwhile, but I hadn’t figured out what my worthwhile-yet-recognized-with-fame-and-success calling would be. Now the fame part feels a lot less appealing. It’s not an accident that this is an anonymous blog! I wouldn’t mind more success though – that would be nice, hehe.
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This is amazing and creative. To me you’re a hero, even just to write this is heroic. Smile a bit for yourself, Young Jewish Professional. 🤗❤
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🥰 I am almost embarrassed to accept this high praise. But if this piece brought you some joy, inspiration, or meaning, for that I am thankful. Thank you for your kind words.
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Hahah… 😅 Don’t be, my friend. You deserve it. All writers are heroes and so are you. Feel most and actually most welcome 💕🌟💕❤
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Learning to accept your successes takes time.
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It can be surprisingly difficult to do. Of course, there are some who accept success and accolades too easily. For a humble person, this is more difficult.
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There is such a state of mind called Impostor Syndrome. I believe it’s widespread.
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I have mixed feelings about Imposter Syndrome. It does exist and it is a fairly widespread phenomenon. But I feel like it is not a helpful or productive concept for self-improvement. I’ve been wanting to explore this in a blog post at some point.
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I’ve often wondered about it but do not know anyone personally who suffers from imposter syndrome to make a valid judgement.
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Love how you ended it. Maybe Wordsworth would have liked to own that line!
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Thank you! I can only take credit for my half of the ending. But we can think of it as a collaboration of sorts!
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You are welcome. Oh, it is a fantastic collaboration and you should take credit where it is due. 🙂
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A thought provoking and cool write!!
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Thank you, and thank you for that Sunday Muse pic. A lot of great images to choose from this week!
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I’ll bet a lot of “heroes” of renown can relate to this!
-David
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Thanks! I suspect that too.
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A masterful combining of two challenges!! Love your description of wearing the hero’s suit! The hero accolade has been tossed my way a few times .. I used to shy away/defer. Today I have properly learned how to say a gracious and heartfelt Thank You!
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The hero’s suit can be an awkward fit especially if it doesn’t feel perfectly tailored.
Accepting a compliment graciously is easier said than done. Good for you for owning this!
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So believable. I wish I could see the whole hero’s outfit. I bet it WAS you. A little getting used to— dazall. (I know you said fictional) happy writing. This is so cool. xoxo
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I decided to go back and do the math. I’ll revise my statement – this poem is only 87.5% fictional because the beginning part about wanting to be a hero is true. But the part about being a hero is not. I’m touched, but you give me far too much credit. Outside of this blog, I’m a materialistic Corporate America Professional doing absolutely nothing heroic. However, I really appreciate your feedback, particularly the piece that this feels believable. I’m trying to experiment with writing characters/narrators who aren’t me, and it’s so helpful to hear what is resonating. Thank you!
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Still, I see The Hero in You.
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And yet someone is bound to relate to it. Very well-written, JYP 🙂
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I do think that in poetry, a poem that is 100% fictional can still be true and relatable. Thank you!
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You’re welcome!
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Writing a poem and hitting the “publish” button makes you a hero.
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You are very kind, qbit. That makes you a hero too!
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What would the world do without such humble heroes?
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Exactly. All heroes should be so humble
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Blogging is all about pivoting, and if you look back at your posting history, you’ll definitely see the phases you went through—just like growing up.
So I’m glad that you’re adding some poetry to your repertoire too. Keep on keeping on, and finding what sings to you when it comes to writing!
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