
At first, you look forward to the fertile days. You let your hopes fly recklessly, like helium balloons into the atmosphere. You imagine yourself glowing, growing beautifully round and radiant. You let yourself dream of nurseries and names.
Two weeks later, you feel the too familiar twist of emotional knife-sharp monthly cramps stabbing your womb and heart. Another month, another moon gone, like the egg from your uterus in a bloody river of wasted potential.
The sun, once bright with promise, becomes glaringly harsh. The discarded days collect into years you don’t have.
Moon, a wasted egg.
The suns toll like taunting bells.
Fewer days remain.
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This is really sad. Well penned but so sad.
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Thanks. I don’t typically use second person point of view, but I thought it was effective here.
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Wonderfully evocative poem. Years ago I had a friend who desperately wanted to have a baby. She cried every month she got her period. I moved away and never knew if she had a child.
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I hope it worked out for her!
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Me too but she was in her 40s when I knew her, so probably not.
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😢 I’m sorry about your friend.
The fact that I’m approaching 40 is not comforting…
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Sadness!! 😦
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oh so sad but poignant!!💖
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Thank you ❤️
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💕🙌
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Sad, but real and raw.
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Thank you. ❤️
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Heartbreaking 💔
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Reblogged this on From guestwriters.
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Necessary realism to regain awareness of the preciousness of life.
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I struggle generally with how to balance realism, pessimism (my natural inclination, which I often equate with realism), and optimism (not my natural inclination, and feels counter to realism)
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Your approach is similar to my own.
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This is sad. I don’t know why women feel they are put on the earth to be mothers or their lives are not fulfilled. There are so many orphaned children who need a mom and family. 😢
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I’d be overjoyed to adopt, actually. There are enough logistical and bureaucratic obstacles in the path to adoption such that I don’t believe that adoption is a hugely more realistic outcome, although yes, it does take away the pressures of the losing fight with biology.
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Adoption is a huge step and not always possible.
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The longing is real… our best friends are childless but they have the status of “favorite” aunt and uncle and are Godparents to so many (my sons are in that number).
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I know there are childless people who can get fulfillment from those favorite aunt/uncle/godparent roles, and I respect that.
However, I’m not one of them. Honestly, I’m too angry to be in a space where I can enjoy this role or even be willing to offer it to my parent-friends in the first place.
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Painful, real. I am praying for your successful conception, gestation and delivery of a healthy, beautiful baby. May God bless you both.
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Thank you, I appreciate this
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super sad 😦
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Wow. Both the prose and the poem – excellent.
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Thanks. I don’t use second person point of view much, but I felt like it would work better than first person here. I think it was effective.
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Your use of words to evoke an experience is so impressive. I feel an ominous sort of sadness in this. I am hoping for a turn to joy for you though!
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Thank you. I really appreciate the feedback on my writing and your blessing and good wishes❤️
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Wow, this touched me real deep. Sending you warm vibes and hopes that the new moon is just a little brighter and filled with life.. ❤️
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Thank you – I appreciate the vibes and blessing ❤️
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So sad.
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Your longing is so raw, real, palpable and relatable, JYP.
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Appreciate the feedback. I don’t typically use second person point of view, but that felt more impactful than first person here. Thank you for the prompt inspiration. I admit I went a bit off-prompt. I’m too self-centered to care what the sun and moon think of each other, only what I think of them.
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Nothing is ever off prompt. A prompt is just a springboard for creativity. I love where it took you….the sun and the moon and their petty squabbles/eternal love etc. be damned! 😉😂
You are welcome.
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Nothing is ever off prompt – I like your style!
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Heartbreaking. Exquisitely expressed. ❤️🩹❤️🩹
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Thank you ❤️
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wow, very well written, is the form haibun?
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Thanks. Yes, although haibun is traditionally written in first person. I just felt like second person was more impactful in this case.
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Gonna be even more fun when the red river dries up (this is coming from someone looking at thirty-five six months from now).
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Ugh, don’t tell me that. I crossed that thirty-five bridge like, two years ago. You have a good and sobering point though. I mean, this blog about menopause says it’s geared for women 35 and older (https://navigatingthechange.com/about-navigating-the-change/) I love K E Garland. but it killed me to read that part of the About page.
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I didn’t want to hit the like button…your pain flows freely from your words. Excellent piece…just wish it wasn’t so for you.
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I know haibun is supposed to be written in first person, but I found the second person point of view to be more impactful so I ran with it.
Thank you for your feedback and kind words.
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Eh…rules…you’ve written a beautiful piece that speaks to others. That’s poetry ♥️
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