dramatically, like photos of an ex. As if this year will actually rebirth us from ordinary dry sand to beautiful glass. But there is no bold break. The waves lap about us like the waves always do. We emerge – softened, but otherwise the same.

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dramatically, like photos of an ex. As if this year will actually rebirth us from ordinary dry sand to beautiful glass. But there is no bold break. The waves lap about us like the waves always do. We emerge – softened, but otherwise the same.
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There is much wisdom in this. Love the ending phrase.
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Thanks! I think that last line is pretty accurate, honestly
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Great use of the title to start the poem and I liked how your created movement and structure.
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Thanks! When you only get 44 words per the prompt, you gotta make that title do some work, you know? Lol. Appreciate the feedback
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Ha, indeed not really possible to shake off all those bad habits just because there is a new year.
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Exactly!
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Every line in this is fantastic.
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This is high praise 🥰Thank you!
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I like it when a poem starts with its title and love the ideas of tearing down ‘old habits dramatically, like photos of an ex’. The bold break of ‘But there is no bold break’ is genius! A neat quadrille.
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It might be one of my favorite line break placements ever. The irony! I’m so glad you caught this!
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Gosh, I LOVE this, especially this line:
As if this year will actually rebirth us
from ordinary dry sand to beautiful glass.
I am trying to make gentle, small changes this year. Slowly, slowly. Perhaps more italicized than bold?
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They say that gentle small changes are more sustainable long term, so maybe that’s the way to go vs. bold breaks. Thank you for the feedback!
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Smooth and clever!
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Thank you!
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You’re very welcome.
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You’ve got your poetry groove back. Love the poem.
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Funny enough, my “new year’s resolution” was to write less blog poetry and focus more on other writing…
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At least you’re writing.
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True.
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I love this. Beautifully written–and so true.
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Thanks! It is weird how we try to break up with ourselves every January…
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You’re welcome! Not really something I do, but I get it. 🙂
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Excellent poem. Although I think I’m getting harder to deal with and a lot crankier as the years roll by beating on me like the waves.
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Good point. “Softer” might be the wrong word here. We probably just get older and crankier.
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or rather, “softened” might have been the wrong word. Can’t even quote my own poem properly, lol
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Yes, this is a good one. I like the transition from the jerky, aggressive tone of the opening to the gentler, oh-what-the-hell of the ending.
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I think that’s not dissimilar to how we approach new year’s resolutions generally. Like we’re all, “new year, new you” to “oh, what the hell” by March
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March is probably optimistic.
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🤣 true
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Two excellent portions juxtaposed.
Nice one!!!
Much❤love
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Thank you! 🥰
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So much said in the title with the first three lines…..
I’ve always thought the idea of New Year’s Resolutions was wishful thinking. 🙂
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When limited to 44 words, gotta make ’em count, right? Thank you!
Yeah, I think new year’s resolutions are generally just wistful thinking.
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Nicely done. Takes a lot of heat to change that dry sand to glass!
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It does! It’s a ridiculous expectation that’ll happen in the new year, you know?
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you never know!
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Great poem. I especially like the first stanza.
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Thank you! Yeah, I liked that image of tearing down photos of an ex too
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Striking contrast to the other posts. The boldness that doesn’t get us anywhere. I love this unique take.
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Gotta be bold and buck the trend, right? Lol. But yeah, all the bold dramatic resolutions of January tend not to be sustainable for long-term change.
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I love it!
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Thanks! I guess it’s more of an anti-rebirth poem than rebirth, but the prompt inspiration helped
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As long as the prompt inspires you, we’re happy. What you do with the inspiration is up to you – and it’s fun to see how differently people respond.
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True. I appreciate when those who set the prompt rules also appreciate the off-prompt deviations. We share the same goal of good writing. And yes, it must be interesting as one who runs a prompt to see the variety of responses it generates.
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This is stunning and I loved it. I always say “bit by bit or baby steps” when changing habits as it seems more doable that way. Thank you for sharing your beautiful words ❤️
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The baby steps approach is probably more sustainable long-term. Thanks
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Amazing poem. The imagery is superb!
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Thank you 😊
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Hope lies eternal.
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A good point. There is a lot of hope that goes into tearing down the old habits
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When it comes to the poems you write, there’s something about them that sounds so smooth to the ear. A lot of the time, I find it hard to feel someone’s love for poetry even though I understand the mechanics of it. (How I worded that says it all.) I get it when I read yours though.
Hopefully that’s for the best, as in (… seems incredibly random but) I’d be devastated if you became super evil and kept shooting words at me like that.
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I’m touched. This is one of the best compliments I’ve received on my blog poetry. I’m not super into rhyme, and I’ll never be a slam poet or the kind of poet who really writes poetry to be heard, but I do try to make the words flow in a smooth way, and I’m so glad to get this feedback that this is working.
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It seems there is something in the air this year with people, bloggers, expressing a more pessimistic sentiment for New Years.
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This is the second negative new year’s sentiment post I’ve written and it’s only January 10. But I’m a whiny pessimist. I have no idea what everyone else’s excuse is
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That’s kind of what I was getting at–the general shoe-drop angst, or whatever, between politics and the weird weather. But my blog universe is wide spread with no local people in it. I don’t get this downer when I’m out and about in my own neighborhood. Do you suppose whiny pessimists are over-represented on the Internet?
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I definitely think whiny pessimists are over-represented on the internet. Being online all the time is not good for the soul.
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I think it’s because *I* was positive this year. I exhaled all my pessimistic fumes out into the world and people are inhaling them.
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Way to go. You sucked up all the positive vibes.
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Now let’s be nice. Hetty deserves positive vibes for all the years of dealing with her awful boss and crazy workplace and wedding planning drama. Besides, this is the internet. Aside from cat videos, is there anything on the internet that really generates positivity? People probably just need to get outside more.
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Well I wrote a nice fluffy white cat story for her.
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Eh don’t worry, my lung capacity is pretty pitiful.
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Like a tree expelling carbon dioxide instead of oxygen? Even if we accept your totally unscientific hypothesis that you exhaled sufficient pessimistic fumes to ruin the entire internet, you deserve the positivity. I forgive you for this
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Aw, thanks. I’m sure I’ll be back to my doom and gloom next year once I’ve settled in.
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Eh, it takes a few years of marriage before you start complaining about your husband. You’ll probably suck up positivity through 2027 at least! Maybe longer! Now there’s a greeting card message: may your marriage be so wonderful that the rest of us breathe in your exhaled pessimism fumes for years to come.
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Enjoyed the last stanza and also the title giving way to rest of the poem. 🙂
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Thanks! When you’re limited to 44 words, you gotta make your title do some work!
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Clever idea!
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I think we try to break off bad habits but circumstances, like the waves, wear down our resolve over and over.
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Ooh, good point! This metaphor requires rethinking…
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Poetry always means something different to each person. Once you release it into the world, who knows…
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For sure. But it is always good to get feedback from others to learn how others are reading this.
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Lovely.
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Thank you!
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You are welcome, darling.
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I want to believe that the transformation will happen if there is a lightning strike, though chances of that are pretty non-existent.. so yeah, pretty much the same 🙂 Good to read your poetry.
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That’s the ideal right? The lightning strike that you don’t have to put any effort into, that doesn’t harm you, makes you perfect and gives you superpowers. But I don’t think it’s all that likely
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There is no bold break Love it and a beautiful last stanza
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That might be my favorite line break ever
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HA! Loved the first two lines . Well penned
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I really liked that idea of ripping down the old calendars like ex photos and trying to break up with ourselves. Glad this resonates with you
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Change doesn’t happen overnight and that the process of change is a never-ending journey. Really loved the metaphors of sand to glass and the repeating waves.
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Thanks! I’m glad it resonated
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I love the idea of being being rebirthed from ordinary sand to glass. Changed but the same wave by wave.
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Indeed! The change is slow and subtle
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“As if this year will actually rebirth us / from ordinary dry sand to beautiful glass” – that is a hard birth!
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It is! Probably why it doesn’t happen often (if ever)
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Very well said!
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Thank you!
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“We emerge – softened,
but otherwise the same.”
Such an expansiveness of thought in such an economy of words.
Love this piece.
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Thank you – so happy to hear that this resonated. It’s not always easy to convey such ideas with few words and I’m glad this came through
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Or sometimes we emerge hardened, maybe? I enjoyed your reflections here.
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Good point. We might well emerge hardened.
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